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The tables below show people s reasons for giving up smoking and when they intend to give up summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant v.2

The tables below show people s reasons for giving up smoking and when they intend to give up
The graphs illustrate the motives of smoker stop smoking, and the specific time they want to abandon their habits. Overall, it is clear that the main reason for people giving up smoking is to meet better physical well-being, while the least because they currently suffer health issue. Majority of smoker have an intention to give up their habit with no particular time. Regarding the first table, just over 64% of the smokers in all categorizes leave their habit because of to have better health in general, following by economic consideration at around 25%-36%. The proportion of people giving up on smoking to have less risk of getting smoking-related illnesses is a-fourth. Lastly, the remaining reasons share just below 20% each. Moving to the second table, 60% of the smoker having 20+ cigarettes per day intent to give up smoking, higher in the group of 10-19 cigarettes and fewer than 10 cigarettes per day (73% and 79% each). just over 25% of all group smokers decide to stop smoking in the next following month, while approximately 20% of them want to stop their behavior in the next following years.
The graphs illustrate the motives of smoker
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stop
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smoking
, and the specific time they want to abandon their habits.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that the main reason for
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people
giving up
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smoking
is to
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meet
better physical well-being, while the least
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because
they
currently
suffer health issue. Majority of smoker have an intention to give up their habit with no particular time.

Regarding the
first
table,
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over 64% of the smokers in all categorizes
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leave
their habit
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because
of to have better health
in general
, following by economic consideration at around 25%-36%. The proportion of
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people
giving up on
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smoking
to have less
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risk
of getting smoking-related illnesses is a-fourth.
Lastly
, the remaining reasons share
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just
below 20% each.

Moving to the second table, 60% of the smoker having 20+ cigarettes per day intent to give up
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smoking
, higher in the group of 10-19 cigarettes and fewer than 10 cigarettes per day (73% and 79% each).
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just
over 25% of all group smokers decide to
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stop
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smoking
in the
next
following month, while approximately 20% of them want to
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stop
their behavior in the
next
following years.
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IELTS academic The tables below show people s reasons for giving up smoking and when they intend to give up

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
188 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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