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The graph below shows the daily consumption of three spreads per person from 1981 to 2007 in a country. v.4

The graph below shows the daily consumption of three spreads per person from 1981 to 2007 in a country. v. 4
The diagram illustrates the information about three types of daily person-consumed spreads in a nation between 1981 and 2007. Overall, there was a significant decline in both margarine and low-fat and reduced spreads, while butter fluctuated erratically. In addition, the number of low-fat was the highest figure at the end of the period. Margarine was initially the highest number of spreads consumed. it stood at around 142 grams. The figure reached the peaks in the next following years at approximately 158 grams. After that, it decreased sharply to about 69 grams in 1996 and followed by a gradual decline to about 60 grams at the end of reported year. The figure of low-fat and reduced spreads was initially a half of that of margarine and, in 1986, it slightly dropped to around 80 grams. Following which, the figure witnessed an incline to d the similar number that of margarine in 1991 (100 grams), before observed a flat change for five years. Lastly, in 2007, the figure went down to about 70 grams. butter was originally used in 1996 and experienced a substantial rise to more than 80 grams in 2001. At the end of the period, it accounted for 40 grams per person.
The diagram illustrates the information about three types of daily person-consumed
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spreads
in a nation between 1981 and 2007.
Overall
, there was a significant decline in both margarine and low-
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fat
and
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reduced
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spreads
, while butter fluctuated
erratically
.
In addition
, the number of low-
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fat
was the highest
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figure
at the
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end
of the period.

Margarine was
initially
the highest number of
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spreads
consumed.
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it
stood at around 142
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grams
. The
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figure
reached the peaks in the
next
following years at approximately 158
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grams
. After that, it decreased
sharply
to about 69
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grams
in 1996 and followed by a gradual decline to about 60
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grams
at the
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end
of reported year.

The
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figure
of low-
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fat
and
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reduced
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spreads
was
initially
a half of that of margarine and, in 1986, it
slightly
dropped to around 80
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grams
. Following which, the
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figure
witnessed an incline to d the similar number that of margarine in 1991 (100
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grams)
,
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before
observed a flat
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change
for five years.
Lastly
, in 2007, the
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figure
went down to about 70 grams.

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butter
was
originally
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used
in 1996 and experienced a substantial rise to more than 80
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grams
in 2001. At the
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end
of the period, it accounted for 40
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grams
per person.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows the daily consumption of three spreads per person from 1981 to 2007 in a country. v. 4

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4 paragraphs
203 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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