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You have a full time job and you are also doing a part time evening course You now find that you cannot continue the course Write a letter to your teachers In your letter describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action v.2

You have a full time job and you are also doing a part time evening course You now find that you cannot continue the course Write a letter to your teachers In your letter describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action v. 2
Dear professor Smitt, I am writing this letter concerning Medical Imaging System course that I every week participate in this class. As you know, I insisted on holding this course between 4PM-6PM regardless of the days of its holding because of my full-time career. Furthermore, it is a postgraduate course and by going ahead, it dramatically becomes hard for me to fulfill the homework. Unfortunately, our firm should participate in an exhibition next month in 16th-28th September inclusive in London and I have to with some employers to manage them. It is very important to me to pass this course with high rank. However, 50 percent of the evaluation is dedicated to homework that should be done on time, and our presence includes 25 percent of the evaluation. Therefore I don’t want to lose my marks because of delaying in homework delivery or lack of presence. If you could please consider my situation and kindly let me give my homework after coming back that will be two day before examination time and please don’t consider my absences. I promise listing to all your recording voices and get the acceptable mark. Your sincerely, Sheyda
Dear professor
Possible spelling mistake found.
Smitt
,

I am writing this letter concerning Medical Imaging System
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
that I every week participate in this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
. As you know, I insisted on holding this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
between 4PM-6PM regardless of the days of its holding
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of my full-time career.
Furthermore
, it is a postgraduate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
and by going ahead, it
dramatically
becomes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
for me to fulfill the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
homework
. Unfortunately, our firm should participate in an exhibition
next
month in 16th-28th September inclusive in London and I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
employers to manage them.

It is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to me to pass this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
with high rank.
However
, 50 percent of the evaluation
is dedicated
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
homework
that should
be done
on time, and our presence includes 25 percent of the evaluation.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Therefore
I don’t want to lose my marks
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of delaying in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
homework
delivery or lack of presence.

If you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
consider my situation and kindly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me give my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
homework
after coming back that will be two day
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
examination time and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
don’t consider my absences. I promise listing to all your recording voices and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the acceptable mark.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
sincerely
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Sheyda
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS academic You have a full time job and you are also doing a part time evening course You now find that you cannot continue the course Write a letter to your teachers In your letter describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action v. 2

Academic
  American English
6 paragraphs
192 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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