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The charts below show the results of a survey conducted by a university library to find out the opinions of full time and part time students about its services v.1

The charts below show the results of a survey conducted by a university library to find out the opinions of full time and part time students about its services v. 1
The pie charts illustrate the results of a survey carried out by a school’s library to find out the perspectives of both full-time and part-time students about the IT support service and its opening hours. Overall, it is clear that full-time students are very happy with the service while part-time ones show little interest. Moreover, all of them are satisfied with the opening hours. Units are measured in percentage. The number of full-time students who were really happy with the IT support contributed the largest, at 55%, whereas only 20% of part-time students were extremely satisfied. It was followed by the proportion of quite happy students in both groups, at around 33%. 13% of full-time students said that they were not happy at all, while that figure for part-time counterparts was significantly high, at 45%. Both full-time and part-time students were highly happy with the service opening hours. The former accounted for 67% while the latter made up to 72%. There were just a few full-time students stated that they were quite happy with the service, at 32%, compared with 23% of part-time ones. Finally, only a minority of students thought that they were not at all satisfied, just 5% or less.
The pie charts illustrate the results of a survey carried out by a school’s library to find out the perspectives of both full-time and part-time
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students
about the IT support
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service
and its opening hours.
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, it is
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that full-time
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students
are
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very
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happy
with the
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service
while part-time ones
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show
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little
interest.
Moreover
, all of them
are satisfied
with the opening hours. Units
are measured
in percentage.

The number of full-time
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students
who were
really
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happy
with the IT support contributed the largest, at 55%, whereas
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only
20% of part-time
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students
were
extremely
satisfied. It
was followed
by the proportion of quite
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happy
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students
in both groups, at around 33%. 13% of full-time
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students
said that they were not
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happy
at all, while that figure for part-time counterparts was
significantly
high, at 45%.

Both full-time and part-time
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students
were
highly
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happy
with the
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service
opening hours. The former accounted for 67% while the latter made up to 72%. There were
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just
a few full-time
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students
stated that they were quite
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happy
with the
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service
, at 32%, compared with 23% of part-time ones.
Finally
,
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only
a minority of
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students
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thought
that they were not at all satisfied,
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just
5% or less.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The charts below show the results of a survey conducted by a university library to find out the opinions of full time and part time students about its services v. 1

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
202 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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