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You are studying a short course in another country Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider There is a major problem with the accommodation Write a letter to the course provider In your letter Say what the problem is Describe the accommod v.2

You are studying a short course in another country Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider There is a major problem with the accommodation Write a letter to the course provider In your letter Say what the problem is Describe the accommod v. 2
Dear Sir/madam, I have come a long way from India to Canada to study a short term professional course at your esteemed institute. It is a six months job oriented diploma provided by your college with in-house sharing room in halls of residence. I was very enthusiastic to live in shared accommodation with students from different parts of the world. But on checking-in i found pathetic conditions at your campus. The brief description is mentioned below. First and foremost, the state of the room is awful. There is no separate bathroom as well as no proper ventilation anywhere around. It feels like one will be chocked in few hours by staying there. To add on, there is also scarce water supply throughout peak hours. The most of amenities do not match with the facilities mentioned in the brochure. This has resulted in agony for many of many of my fellow students and me. I was not expecting such a low standard from one of the reputed institutions in Canada. So, it is my humble request to provide me an alternate and better room or upgraded the provided one. I hope concerned authorities will listen to my needs and will chalk out a plan of action at the earliest nor i have to adopt a legal course of action. Regards, Maninder
Dear Sir/madam,

I have
come
a long way from India to Canada to study a short term professional course at your esteemed institute. It is a six months job oriented diploma provided by your college with in-
house
sharing room in halls of residence. I was
very
enthusiastic to
live
in shared accommodation with students from
different
parts of the world.
But
on checking-in
i
found


pathetic
conditions at your campus. The brief description
is mentioned
below.

First
and foremost, the state of the room is awful. There is no separate bathroom
as well
as no proper ventilation anywhere around. It feels like one will
be chocked
in few hours by staying there. To
add
on, there is
also
scarce water supply throughout peak hours. The
most of amenities
do not match with the facilities mentioned in the brochure. This has resulted in agony for
many
of
many
of my fellow students and me. I was not expecting such a low standard from one of the reputed institutions in Canada.

So
, it is my humble request to provide me an alternate and better room or upgraded the provided one. I hope concerned authorities will listen to my needs and will chalk out a plan of action at the earliest nor
i
have to
adopt a legal course of action.

Regards,

Maninder
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS academic You are studying a short course in another country Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider There is a major problem with the accommodation Write a letter to the course provider In your letter Say what the problem is Describe the accommod v. 2

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219 words
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