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The table below shows show the number of cars made in Argentina, Australia and Thailand from 2003 to 2009. v.2

The table below shows show the number of cars made in Argentina, Australia and Thailand from 2003 to 2009. v. 2
The table illustrates the amount of cars manufactured in three different countries, namely Argentina, Australia and Thailand between 2003 and 2009. Overall, Thailand has the largest number of cars produced, while the figure for Argentina was the lowest. In 2003, the number of cars made in Thailand was the highest (nearly 785 000 cars), followed by Australia and Argentina, with more than 430 000 and approximately 146 000 cars respectively. We can also see that in 2006, Argentina surpassed Australia to be the second for the number of cars produced, at 413 062 cars. In 2009, It is noticeable that the figure for cars made in Thailand fell down, at just more than 950 cars. However, the proportion of cars manufactured in this country always predominated among three countries through 6 years and even was quadruple the figure for the cars made in Australia. Moreover, Australia was had the lowest number of cars made, at just 212 647 cars. There was an upward trend of the number of cars made in Argentina. By contrast, Australia experienced a downward trend.
The table illustrates the amount of
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cars
manufactured in three
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different
countries,
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Argentina, Australia and Thailand between 2003 and 2009.

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, Thailand has the largest
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number
of
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cars
produced, while the figure for Argentina was the lowest.

In 2003, the
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number
of
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cars
made in Thailand was the highest (
nearly
785 000
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cars)
, followed by Australia and Argentina, with more than 430 000 and approximately 146 000
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cars
respectively
. We can
also
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see
that in 2006, Argentina surpassed Australia to be the second for the
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number
of
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cars
produced, at 413 062 cars.

In 2009, It is noticeable that the figure for
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cars
made in Thailand fell down, at
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just
more than 950
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cars
.
However
, the proportion of
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cars
manufactured in this country always predominated among three countries through 6 years and even was quadruple the figure for the
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cars
made in Australia.
Moreover
, Australia
was had
the lowest
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number
of
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cars
made, at
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212 647
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cars
. There was an upward trend of the
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number
of
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cars
made in Argentina. By contrast, Australia experienced a downward trend.
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18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The table below shows show the number of cars made in Argentina, Australia and Thailand from 2003 to 2009. v. 2

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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