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The pie charts and the table show the types of living accommodation occupied by 25-year-olds in London during yhr 1990s and 2010s and the availability of different types of accommodation in London during the same two periods. v.1

The pie charts and the table show the types of living accommodation occupied by 25-year-olds in London during yhr 1990s and 2010s and the availability of different types of accommodation in London during the same two periods. v. 1
The pie charts compare the survey of 25 years old accommodation in London and the table show the availability of different kinds of housing in London in 1990 and 2010. In general terms, shared accommodation has become the most common from if housing for this age group in the 1990s and 2010s. however, the number of available 1-2 bedroom houses and falts has reduced the housing choices for this age group during the same periods. It is clear from the charts show that in the 1990s, only about 50% of those surveyed lived in shared house or flats. Nevertheless, this number has grown to around 75% in the 2010s. In contrast, there was a drop in the number of people living alone in alone house and flat from about 25% to nearly 5% from 1990 to 2010. In addition, living with parents hs become less common. There was a reduction in the number of 25-year-olds living with parents from approximately a third to under a quarter in this periods. On the other hand, the reduction in the availability of 1-2 bedroom houses and flats has altered this figure. In the 1990s, there were 34000 1-2 bedroom houses and 32000 1-2 bedroom flats availbale. These figure decreased to 12000 and 10000 respectively in 2000.
The pie charts compare the survey of 25 years
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accommodation in London and the table
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the availability of
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kinds of housing in London in 1990 and 2010.

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of available 1-2
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bedroom
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the housing choices for this age group during the same periods.

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from the charts
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that in the 1990s,
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about 50% of those surveyed
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lived
in shared
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flats
.
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, this
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has grown to around 75% in the 2010s.
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, there was a drop in the
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of
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living alone in alone
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flat
from about 25% to
nearly
5% from 1990 to 2010.
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become less common. There was a reduction in the
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of 25-year-olds living with parents from approximately a third to under a quarter in
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periods.

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, the reduction in the availability of 1-2
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and
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has altered this figure. In the 1990s, there were 34000 1-2
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bedroom
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and 32000 1-2
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availbale
. These figure decreased to 12000 and 10000
respectively
in 2000.
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IELTS academic The pie charts and the table show the types of living accommodation occupied by 25-year-olds in London during yhr 1990s and 2010s and the availability of different types of accommodation in London during the same two periods. v. 1

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