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Topic The charts show information about the reading habits of UK teenagers Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features Make comparisons where relevant v.2

Topic The charts show information about the reading habits of UK teenagers
The two bar charts illustrate the distribution of girls and boys hobbies on each specific genres as well as the average books read by teenager per month in the United Kingdom in 2016. In overall, both genders shared the same interests on some typical books, namely: Fantasy, Adventure, and Science Fiction compared to the sharp contrast in Romance. In addition, a majority of teenagers considered reading books is their monthly hobby. It can be seen clearly from the first picture, there was almost no distinction between both two genders with the proportions of girls and boys voted for Fantasy, Adventure and Science Fiction were 60% and 59%; 56% for both; 43% and 45% respectively. While there was a considerable discrepancy between those two groups was observed in Romance with only 5% boys voted, just one-tenth of the weaker gender. In the second figure, 85% teenagers showed interests in reading books, with a reading rate fluctuated around one to three books per month. The number of readers gradually decreased, which is inversely proportional to the increase in book numbers. Conversely, there was a startling point in the quantity of people reading more than six books monthly, which accounted 10% of those surveyed respondents, as opposed to just 2% or 1% people read five or six books respectively.
The two bar charts illustrate the distribution of girls and boys hobbies on each specific genres
as well
as the average
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books
read by
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teenager
per month in the United Kingdom in 2016.

In
overall
, both genders shared the same interests on
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some
typical
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books
,
namely
: Fantasy, Adventure, and Science Fiction compared to the sharp contrast in Romance.
In addition
, a majority of
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teenagers
considered
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reading
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books
is their monthly hobby.

It can be
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seen
clearly
from the
first
picture, there was almost no distinction between both two genders with the proportions of girls and boys voted for Fantasy, Adventure and Science Fiction were 60% and 59%; 56% for both; 43% and 45%
respectively
. While there was a considerable discrepancy between those two groups
was observed
in Romance with
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only
5% boys voted,
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just
one-tenth of the weaker gender.

In the second figure, 85%
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teenagers
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showed
interests in
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reading
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books
, with a
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reading
rate fluctuated around one to three
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books
per month. The number of readers
gradually
decreased, which is
inversely
proportional to the increase in
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book
numbers.
Conversely
, there was a startling point in the quantity of
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people
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reading
more than six
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books
monthly, which accounted 10% of those surveyed respondents, as opposed to
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just
2% or 1%
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people
read five or six
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books
respectively
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic Topic The charts show information about the reading habits of UK teenagers

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
216 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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