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You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe w v.3

You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe w v. 3
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to ask your permission regarding the use of community hall for our music sessions. We are a band of five friends and been using the auditorium for the last three years. We play jazz and opera twice a week on every Tuesday and Friday. Our practice continues for only four hours in the evening. It is a sort of free of cost concert where the general public has an open invitation. I am sure that the audience enjoys the music and it is cheap entertainment for them. As you know, in our small town people do not have many recreational activities. So, our opera sessions are a source of enjoyment for the residents. Unfortunately, I came to know about the recent notification. According to which we are not allowed to use the hall on the days we used to jam. I request you to find an alternate way. I am sure that if we shift to Wednesday and Saturday evening, it will not be a problem for you too. Please permit us to play our music on these days from 5 pm to 7 pm. I hope your response at your earliest. Yours Sincerely, Wajeeha Umer
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to ask your permission regarding the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of community hall for our music sessions. We are a band of five friends and been using the auditorium for the last three years. We play jazz and opera twice a week on every Tuesday and Friday. Our practice continues for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
four hours in the evening. It is a sort of free of cost concert where the
Consider using "public".
general public
has an open invitation.

I am sure that the audience enjoys the music and it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
entertainment for them. As you know, in our
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
town
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
do not have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
recreational activities.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, our opera sessions are a source of enjoyment for the residents.

Unfortunately, I came to know about the recent notification. According to which we are not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the hall on the days we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to jam. I request you to find an alternate way. I am sure that if we shift to Wednesday and Saturday evening, it will not be a problem for you too.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
permit us to play our music on these days from 5 pm to 7 pm.

I hope your response at your earliest.

Yours
Sincerely
,

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Wajeeha
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Umer
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0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe w v. 3

Academic
  American English
7 paragraphs
202 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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