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You are looking for a part time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter: Introduce yourselfExplain what experience and special skills you haveTell him/her when you think you could start. v.6

You are looking for a part time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter: Introduce yourselfExplain what experience and special skills you haveTell him/her when you think you could start. v. 6
Dear Sir/Madam, My name is Sudheerkumar Motakatla and I am a 22-year-old student. I am studying Sports Coaching Science at St Mary' s University. I am writing this to ask you, if there are any part-time job vacancies are available in your football club. I genuinely admire sports and my area of particular interest and experience are Football, Rugby and Cricket. I am one of the key players in my college Football team and I have had some experience in coaching for these sports over the past three years that I am yet the University. Last year I have worked in another club in England as an assistant coach for school team. I will provide the references from my previous job. I would prefer to work in the evenings in weekdays and I can manage to work whole in weekends. Weekdays I have to go my classes in day timing and I can start working for you from November. I do hope you will be interested in my application. I look forward to hearing from you in the near future. Yours faithfully, Sudheerkumar Motakatla
Dear Sir/Madam,

My name is
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Sudheerkumar
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Motakatla and
I am a 22-year-
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old
student. I am studying Sports Coaching Science at St
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Mary&
#039; s University. I am writing this to ask you
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, if
there are any part-time job vacancies are available in your football club.

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I
genuinely
admire sports and my area of particular interest and experience are Football, Rugby and Cricket.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am one of the key players in my college Football team and I have had
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
experience in coaching for these sports over the past three years that I am
yet
the University. Last year I have worked in another club in England as an assistant coach for school team. I will provide the references from my previous job.

I would prefer to work in the evenings in weekdays and I can manage to work whole in weekends. Weekdays I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
go my classes in day timing and I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
working for you from November. I do hope you will
be interested
in my application.

I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Sudheerkumar
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Motakatla
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS academic You are looking for a part time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter: Introduce yourselfExplain what experience and special skills you haveTell him/her when you think you could start. v. 6

Academic
  American English
7 paragraphs
183 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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