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The given table illustates data about the level of satisfaction of a urban sport club that is evaluated in three criterias: range of activities, club facilities and opening hours. v.1

The given table illustates data about the level of satisfaction of a urban sport club that is evaluated in three criterias: range of activities, club facilities and opening hours. v. 1
The given table illustates data about the level of satisfaction of a urban sport club that is evaluated in three criterias: range of activities, club facilities and opening hours. Overall, majority of boy and girl members say that they feel very satisfied in above issues. the proportion of very satisfied of female members is overwhelming in club facilities and opening hours compare to male one. As is observed from graph that regarding range of activities, over a half of boy members says that they gain high satisfaction compare to only 35% of girl members. Meanwhile, only 5% of male members shows their opinion that they are not satisfied of range of activities, this figure for girl makes up approximately a third. In terms of club facilities, there are significant percentages in high safisfaction of this criteria, at nearly 65% for each. 27% of male members says that they feel satisfied and only 10% is not satisfied while the percentage of not satisfied of female accounts for 14%. It is noticeable that female members who show very satisfied is 72% and only 3% is not favorable. By contrast, 37% of female members is not satisfied of opening hours while the figure for very satisfied occupies 44% in total.
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illustates
data about the level of satisfaction of
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urban sport
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club
that
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criterias
: range of activities,
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club
facilities and opening hours.
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majority of
boy and girl
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members
say that they feel
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very
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satisfied
in above issues.
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the
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very
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satisfied
of
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female
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members
is overwhelming in
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club
facilities and opening hours compare to male one.

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from graph that regarding range of activities, over a half of boy
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members
says that they gain high satisfaction compare to
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35% of girl
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members
. Meanwhile,
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only
5% of male
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members
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shows
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satisfied
of range of activities, this figure for girl
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facilities, there are significant percentages in high
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safisfaction
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criteria, at
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members
says that they feel
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and
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only
10% is not
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while the percentage of not
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of
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female
accounts for 14%. It is noticeable that
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female
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members
who
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show
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very
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is 72% and
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3% is not favorable. By contrast, 37% of
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female
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members
is not
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satisfied
of opening hours while the figure for
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very
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satisfied
occupies 44% in total.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS academic The given table illustates data about the level of satisfaction of a urban sport club that is evaluated in three criterias: range of activities, club facilities and opening hours. v. 1

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
207 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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