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The table below show the income and expenditure of Harckley Hall, a public place for hiring over the period of three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The table below show the income and expenditure of Harckley Hall, a public place for hiring over the period of three years.
The table shows the figures for income and expenditure of Harckley Hall, which is a public place for hiring, over the period of three years. It is clear that the majority of income went on hiring room, over 32000 pounds, consistently constituting almost 40% of the total income in the three years, but declined steadily. Compare with that, the income of cafe after experiencing a decline, but got rebound in the third year, at 4000 pounds, making up a negligible proportion of the total income. Looking at the information in more detail, it also can be seen that the funding from local council slightly lower in year 3, from 22000 pounds to 21000 pounds. At the same time, other sources' funding significantly increased in the past 3 years, at 27000 pounds finally. However, the overall expenditure increased continuously, up to 62000 pounds in the third year, while cause it shows the decreasing trend of of final profit in the past three years, have been reduced 5500 pounds from the first year.
The table
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the figures for
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income
and expenditure of
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Harckley
Hall, which is a public place for hiring, over the period of three years.

It is
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clear
that the majority of
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income
went on hiring room, over
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32000 pounds
,
consistently
constituting almost 40% of the total
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income
in the three years,
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but
declined
steadily
. Compare with that, the
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income
of
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cafe
after experiencing a decline,
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but
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got
rebound in the third
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year
, at
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4000 pounds
, making up a negligible proportion of the total income.

Looking at the information in more detail, it
also
can be
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seen
that the funding from local council
slightly
lower in
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year
3, from
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22000 pounds
to
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21000 pounds
. At the same time, other
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sources&
#039; funding
significantly
increased in the past 3 years, at
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27000 pounds
finally
.

However
, the
overall
expenditure increased
continuously
, up to
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62000 pounds
in the third
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year
, while cause it
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shows
the decreasing trend
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of of
final profit in the past three years, have been
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reduced
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5500 pounds
from the
first
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year
.
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IELTS academic The table below show the income and expenditure of Harckley Hall, a public place for hiring over the period of three years.

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4 paragraphs
171 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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