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You want to learn a foreign language for work purposes from a teacher in your locality Write a letter to him her and say Explain the reason for learning How will it help with your work Ask a few details about the course How did you hear about him her v.2

You want to learn a foreign language for work purposes from a teacher in your locality Write a letter to him her and say Explain the reason for learning How will it help with your work Ask a few details about the course How did you hear about him her v. 2
Dear Sir, I am writing to apply for the two weeks course of learning French language from your institution. At the outset, please note that I am working in French Republican Associates and recently, have been promoted to the post of senior sales manager. During the course of my work, I get to interact with lot of French people, who are supposed to be my clients also. Since, I am a career oriented person, so learning this language will not only help me in better communication with clients but it will also help me to travel in many parts of the European countries, with ease to expand the sales of the company that will in-turn be beneficial for my career. Nevertheless, last week, during the discussion over coffee, a friend of mine recommended me your name who by the way is already engaged in a six week' s course. However, I am through with Novice level and want to go ahead with the advance level. Moreover, I would also like to enquire about the course duration, the curriculum that I will be covering and lastly, the cost of the programme. I look forward to hearing from you and thank you in advance for your help and cooperation. Yours sincerely, Hiten
Dear Sir,

I am writing to apply for the two weeks
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course
of learning French language from your institution.

At the outset,
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please
note that I am working in French Republican Associates and recently, have
been promoted
to the post of senior sales manager. During the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
of my work, I
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get
to interact with
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lot of
French
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people
, who
are supposed
to be my clients
also
. Since, I am a
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career oriented
person,
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so
learning this language will not
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only
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help
me in better communication with clients
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but
it will
also
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help
me to travel in
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many
parts of the European countries, with
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ease
to expand the sales of the
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company
that will in-turn be beneficial for my career.

Nevertheless
, last week, during the discussion over coffee, a friend of mine recommended me your name who by the way is already engaged in a six
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week&
#039; s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
.
However
, I am through with Novice level and want to go ahead with the advance level.
Moreover
, I would
also
like to
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enquire
about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
duration, the curriculum that I will be covering and
lastly
, the cost of the
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programme
.

I look forward to hearing from you and thank you in advance for your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
and cooperation.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Hiten
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS academic You want to learn a foreign language for work purposes from a teacher in your locality Write a letter to him her and say Explain the reason for learning How will it help with your work Ask a few details about the course How did you hear about him her v. 2

Academic
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7 paragraphs
209 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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