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WRITING TASK 1The charts show what the Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes v.2

WRITING TASK 1The charts show what the Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school.
The chart gives information about an Australian institution whom students were doing further education and job, in contrast, to unemployed students after attending senior high school. According to the chart, in 1980 fifty percent of students opt for higher education studies which is among the highest percentage as compared to 38 percent and 37 percent in 1990 and 2000 respectively. Furthermore, the lowest percentage of unemployment lies in 2000(8 percent) when correlating it with percentage in 1980(10 percent) and 1990(12 percent). while in 1990 the successful ratio of job hunters are 5 percent less than as in 2000. In the same way, the largest number of working students accounts for 55% in 2000 in correspondence to 40% in 1980 which is the lowest of all years. Overall, keen observation reveals that students choose to job more in 2000 and not going for further studies. In addition to this unemployment ratio also has a negotiable decrease(8%) which had an increased percentage in 1990(12%) and 1980(10%) as well.
The chart gives information about an Australian institution whom
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students
were doing
further
education and job,
in contrast
, to unemployed
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students
after attending senior high school.

According to the chart, in 1980 fifty
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percent
of
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students
opt for higher education studies which is among the highest
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percentage
as compared to 38
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percent
and 37
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percent
in 1990 and 2000
respectively
.

Furthermore
, the lowest
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percentage
of unemployment lies in 2000(8
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percent)
when correlating it with
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percentage
in 1980(10
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percent)
and 1990(12
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percent)
.
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while
in 1990 the successful ratio of job hunters are 5
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percent
less than as in 2000.

In the same way
, the largest number of working
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students
accounts for 55% in 2000 in correspondence to 40% in 1980 which is the lowest of all years.

Overall
, keen observation reveals that
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students
choose to job more in 2000 and not going for
further
studies.
In addition
to this unemployment ratio
also
has a negotiable decrease(8%) which had an increased
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percentage
in 1990(12%) and 1980(10%)
as well
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS academic WRITING TASK 1The charts show what the Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school.

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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