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The pictures show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK v.2

The pictures show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK v. 2
The table illustrates how much money can be earned and used for food and clothes of an average family in a UK city. Generally, the total income of an average British family decreased between 2010 and 2013, while the amount of money spent on food and clothing increased. Additionally, the resident here paid much more money on food than clothes in both years. As can be seen from the table, in 2010, people with average living standards in England made 29, 000$, and nearly half of them were applied in food and clothes. Over the next three years, the average income of a family in Britain fell to about 25, 000$. Meanwhile, there was a growth of 1, 000$ in the expenditure on food and clothes. Regarding the pie charts, the percentage of spending on meat and fish was highest among all categories in 2010, at 29%, but three years later experienced a drop to 23%. Similarly, the rate of money using for clothes also went down from 15% to 13%. On the other hand, it seems that people expended more money on fruit, vegetables, and dairy products as the figures rose to 30% and 16%, respectively. Meanwhile, the proportion of spending on other food remained unchanged at exactly 18%.
The table illustrates how much
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money
can
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and
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used
for
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food
and
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clothes
of an
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average
family in a UK city.

Generally
, the total income of an
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average
British family decreased between 2010 and 2013, while the amount of
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money
spent on
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food
and clothing increased.
Additionally
, the resident here paid much more
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money
on
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food
than
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clothes
in both years.

As can be
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seen
from the table, in 2010,
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people
with
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average
living standards in England made 29,
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000$
, and
nearly
half of them
were applied
in
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food
and
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clothes
. Over the
next
three years, the
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average
income of a family in Britain fell to about 25,
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000$
. Meanwhile, there was a growth of 1,
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000$
in the expenditure on
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food
and clothes.

Regarding the pie charts, the percentage of spending on meat and fish was highest among all categories in 2010, at 29%,
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but
three years later experienced a drop to 23%.
Similarly
, the rate of
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money
using for
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clothes
also
went down from 15% to 13%.
On the other hand
, it seems that
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people
expended more
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money
on fruit, vegetables, and dairy products as the figures rose to 30% and 16%,
respectively
. Meanwhile, the proportion of spending on other
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food
remained unchanged at exactly 18%.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic The pictures show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK v. 2

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4 paragraphs
210 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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