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[writing task 1] - The pie charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010 v.2

[writing task 1] - The pie charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010 v. 2
The pie charts compare tourists' responses to satisfaction questions about Parkway Hotel and how these figures varied from 2005 and 2010. It is clear that customer satisfaction increased significantly during a 5-year period. A majority of hotel guests voted customer service as satisfactory and poor in 2005, while good and excellent were described mostly the hotel' s service over the next 5 years in 2010. Looking at the positive feedback first, in 2005, only 5% of guests thought the hotel' s service as excellent, but this figure increased rapidly to 28% in 2010. Furthermore, the proportion of clients considered that its service quality to be good made up almost three times five years later. With regard to negative responses, the poor result of the hotel' s customer service decreased from 21% in 2005 to 12% in 2010. Similarly, the proportion of customers thought that very poor quality fell moderately from 15% to 4% during the 5-year period. Finally, a plummet in the number of satisfactory rating reflected that the fact that more people gave positive responses to the survey in that year.
The pie charts compare
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and how these figures varied
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from 2005 and 2010
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that
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customer
satisfaction increased
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5-year
period. A majority of
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hotel
guests voted
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customer
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service
as satisfactory and poor in 2005, while
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good
and excellent were
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described
mostly
the
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hotel&
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over the
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5 years in 2010.

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first
, in 2005,
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5% of guests
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thought
the
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service
as excellent,
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but
this figure increased
rapidly
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, the proportion of clients considered that its
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service
quality to be
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good
made up almost three times five years later.

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negative
responses, the poor result of the
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customer
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service
decreased from 21% in 2005 to 12% in 2010.
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customers
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thought
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very
poor quality fell
moderately
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5-year
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people
gave
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responses to the survey in that
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year
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5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic [writing task 1] - The pie charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010 v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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