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he chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. v.2

he chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. v. 2
The given bar chart illustrates the information about the students used five types (car passenger, walking, cycling, walking and bus, bus) of transportation modes for trips of one country in 1990 and 2010. Overall, the walking was preferred by majority of students for trip in 1990 while most of the students chose car for their travel in 2010. Regarding the bar chart, the highest number of students walked for their trip which accounted for almost 12. 5 millions in comparison with the least preference given to car by only 4. 5 million of students in 1990. The other categories cycling, walking with bus and bus was selected by 6. 2, 5. 9 and 6. 5 million of students respectively. On the other hand, the reverse has been observed in the case of car passenger, they peaked at 10. 5 millions in 2010 in contrast to last in 1990. The figures for all the other categories plummeted dramatically up to 6, 2, 3 and 4. 5 million of students for walking, cycling, walking with bus and bus respectively.
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students
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five types
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(car
passenger, walking, cycling, walking and bus, bus) of transportation modes for trips of one country in 1990 and 2010.

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, the walking
was preferred
by majority of
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students
for trip in 1990 while most of the
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students
chose
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car
for their travel in 2010.

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students
walked for their trip which accounted for almost 12. 5
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millions
in comparison
with the least preference
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given
to
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car
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only
4. 5
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million
of
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students
in 1990. The other categories cycling, walking with bus and bus
was selected
by 6. 2, 5. 9 and 6. 5
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million
of
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students
respectively
.

On the other hand
, the reverse has
been observed
in the case of
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car
passenger, they peaked at 10. 5
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millions
in 2010
in contrast
to last in 1990. The figures for all the other categories plummeted
dramatically
up to 6, 2, 3 and 4. 5
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million
of
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students
for walking, cycling, walking with bus and bus
respectively
.
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16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic he chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. v. 2

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