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The diagram below shows some design principles for an energy efficient house and how they work in different climates Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The diagram below shows some design principles for an energy efficient house and how they work in different climates
The given diagram depicts the basic functioning of an energy-efficient building both in a warm and and cold environment. Starting with the former, the key part of the system is the reflective material used to build a roof capable to reflect the sunbeams and therefore to avoid the penetration of the of the heat inside the house which is protected even from the ground, because the floor is below the ground level. The last feature is also important during the winter, when the temperatures drop down: an interred floor is capable to retain the heat generated inside the building and this effect is boosted by the triple-glazed window that allows more warmth and heat to come inside and to not sniff out, this greenhouse effect is corroborated by the insulating walls, which are constructed using special materials that do not allow the heat to go out.
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diagram depicts the basic functioning of an energy-efficient building both in a warm
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and and
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cold
environment.

Starting with the former, the key part of the system is the reflective material
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used
to build a roof capable to reflect the sunbeams and
therefore
to avoid the penetration
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of the of the
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heat
inside the
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house
which
is protected
even from the ground,
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because
the floor is below the ground level.

The last feature is
also
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important
during the winter, when the temperatures
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drop down
: an interred floor is capable to retain the
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heat
generated inside the building and this effect
is boosted
by the triple-glazed window that
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allows
more warmth and
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heat
to
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come
inside and to not sniff out, this greenhouse effect
is corroborated
by the insulating walls, which
are constructed
using special materials that do not
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allow
the
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heat
to go out.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows some design principles for an energy efficient house and how they work in different climates

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
146 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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