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The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel s customer service The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010 v.4

The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel s customer service The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010 v. 4
The charts compares visitors’ answered in the survey about customer service of the Parkway Hotel in 2005 and 2010. It is clear that the rate of visitors replied about satisfaction increased from 2005 to 2010. At the start of the period, with a mere of 5 % guests hotel rated excellent in the hotel’s customer service. This figure witnessed a significant rise to 28 % in 2010. The percentage of visitors replied good in hotel’s customer servise was 14 % in 2005. Howevery this rate rose dramatically to 39% in 2010 which was nearly third as high as this rate in 2005. In 2005, 45 % of hotel customers answered satisfactory in the survey while this rate was only 17 % in 2010. The rate of visitor replied poor in the servey in 2005 were 21% and this proportion decreased sharply to 12% in 2010. Similarlly, 15% of hotel guests answerd very poor in the servey in 2005 and this rate experienced a significant drop to 4% in 2010.
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IELTS academic The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel s customer service The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010 v. 4

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
169 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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