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Writing Task 1 The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up to the minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below v.2

Writing Task 1 The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up to the minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below v. 2
The diagram illustrates the processes of how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collect information related to weather so as to produce reliable forecasts. Based on the diagram, it can be seen that there are three ways to get the weather information which include the information from satellite, radar, and drafting buoy. These sources enable the Australian Bureau of Meteorology to analyse and forecast the weather. In the step of analysis and forecasting, the observation is made based on the satellite photo, radar screen, and synoptic chart. The personnel of the bureaucracy will have to predict the temperature and the type of weather by observing whether there are many clouds in the sky or it is going to be a sunny day. After that, the detailed analysis and forecast of the weather will be written using a computer and the report of the forecast is then ready to be broadcast in multimedia such as television newsreader, radio and recorded announcement. To sum up, there are three main steps in producing a reliable weather forecast. It is important that weather forecast be as accurate as possible so that people have some preparations such as bringing umbrella if it is predicted to be rainy day and so on.
The diagram illustrates the processes of how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collect information related to
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weather
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so as to
produce reliable forecasts.

Based on the diagram, it can be
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seen
that there are three ways to
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get
the
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weather
information which include the information from satellite, radar, and drafting buoy. These sources enable the Australian Bureau of Meteorology to
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analyse
and
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forecast
the
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weather
. In the step of analysis and forecasting, the observation
is made
based on the satellite photo, radar screen, and synoptic chart. The personnel of the bureaucracy will
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have to
predict the temperature and the type of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
weather
by observing whether there are
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many
clouds in the sky or it is going to be a sunny day. After that, the detailed analysis and
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forecast
of the
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weather
will
be written
using a computer and the report of the
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forecast
is then ready to be broadcast in multimedia such as television newsreader, radio and recorded announcement.

To sum up, there are three main steps in producing a reliable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
weather
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
forecast
. It is
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important
that
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weather
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forecast
be as accurate as possible
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so
that
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people
have
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some
preparations such as bringing umbrella if it
is predicted
to be rainy day and
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so
on.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS academic Writing Task 1 The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up to the minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
205 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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