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The first chart shows the energy use in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from the energy use. Summarise the information below, report changes and make comparisons where necessary v.2

The first chart shows the energy use in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from the energy use.
The first graph illustrates the proportions of six different types of energy used in an average household in Australia. The second chart demonstrates the percentages of greenhouse gas emissions resulted from the energy use. Overall, it is clear that in Australia, heating is the most frequently used energy, while water heating creates the most gas emissions. Looking at the first graph, it is noticeable that Australian households use heating as their main source of energy, accounted for 42%. Meanwhile, water heating and other appliances are also often used energy just after heating, with 30% and 15% respectively. On the other hand, cooling, lighting and refrigeration are among the least used types of energy, only 13% in total. At the same time, as displayed in the second chart, water heating becomes the largest gas emitted source with 32%, followed by other appliances with just 4% in difference, accounted for about 28% of the total figures. In addition, heating and refrigeration are almost the same proportions in terms of producing greenhouse gas emissions. Last but not least, cooling and lighting create the least amount of gas emissions, with the percentages just around 3% and 8% accordingly.
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first
graph illustrates the proportions of six
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different
types of
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energy
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used
in an average household in Australia. The second chart demonstrates the percentages of greenhouse
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gas
emissions resulted from the
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energy
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use
.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that in Australia,
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heating
is the most
frequently
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used
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energy
, while water
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heating
creates the most
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gas
emissions.

Looking at the
first
graph, it is noticeable that Australian households
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use
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heating
as their main source of
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energy
, accounted for 42%. Meanwhile, water
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heating
and other appliances are
also
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often
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used
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energy
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just
after
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heating
, with 30% and 15%
respectively
.
On the other hand
, cooling, lighting and refrigeration are among the least
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used
types of
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energy
,
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only
13% in total.

At the same time, as displayed in the second chart, water
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heating
becomes the largest
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gas
emitted source with 32%, followed by other appliances with
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just
4% in difference, accounted for about 28% of the total figures.
In addition
,
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heating
and refrigeration are almost the same proportions in terms of producing greenhouse
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gas
emissions. Last
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but
not least, cooling and lighting create the least amount of
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gas
emissions, with the percentages
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just
around 3% and 8%
accordingly
.
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IELTS academic The first chart shows the energy use in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from the energy use.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
194 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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