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The diagram below shows the process from Australian Bureau of Meteorology of collecting up-to-minute information for the purpose of producting reliable weather forecasts. Describe the process in detail. v.2

The diagram below shows the process from Australian Bureau of Meteorology of collecting up-to-minute information for the purpose of producting reliable weather forecasts. Describe the process in detail. v. 2
The diagram illustrates the multi-stage process of collecting immediate information for the purpose of producing trustworthy weather forecasts from the Australian Bureau of Meteorology. Overall, it can be seen that the whole process can be roughly divided into two stages. The first stage is receiving information, analysing and forecasting while the second stage is broadcasting the information. Firstly, as displayed in the chart, there are three different types of information transmitting devices: satellite, radar and drifting buoy. The first two work independently to produce information forecasts in the form of images including satellite photo and radar screen. However, the last type of information, which is the synoptic chart, has to be produced by all three devices. Secondly, the next stage is to convert the forecast into different kinds of announcement. This is done through gathering forecasted information into one main computer server, then preparing to broadcast it onto three different channels: TV newsreader, radio and telephone. While TV and radio are known to be places where the audience can get the information on demand, the telephone can help people have access to urgent, up-to-minute information in a timely manner.
The diagram illustrates the multi-stage process of collecting immediate
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information
for the purpose of producing trustworthy weather forecasts from the Australian Bureau of Meteorology.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that the whole process can be roughly divided into two
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stages
. The
first
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stage
is receiving
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information
,
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analysing
and forecasting while the second
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stage
is broadcasting the information.

Firstly
, as displayed in the chart, there are three
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different
types of
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information
transmitting devices: satellite, radar and drifting buoy. The
first
two work
independently
to produce
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information
forecasts in the form of images including satellite photo and radar screen.
However
, the last type of
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information
, which is the synoptic chart,
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has to
be produced
by all three devices.

Secondly
, the
next
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stage
is to convert the forecast into
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different
kinds of announcement. This
is done
through gathering forecasted
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information
into one main computer server, then preparing to broadcast it onto three
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different
channels: TV newsreader, radio and telephone. While TV and radio
are known
to be places where the audience can
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get
the
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information
on demand, the telephone can
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help
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people
have access to urgent, up-to-minute
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information
in a timely manner.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the process from Australian Bureau of Meteorology of collecting up-to-minute information for the purpose of producting reliable weather forecasts. Describe the process in detail. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
189 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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