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The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts. v.1

The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts. v. 1
The given diagram shows how the weather information is collected by Australian Bureau of Meteorology to provide accurate and updated weather forecasting. As is observed from the given illustration, the weather information collection is done via satellites, radars and drifting buoys and then analysed before broadcasting them to the public. As is presented in the diagram, the weather information is collected using three different types of sources namely, satellites, radars and drifting buoys. The raw data collected from satellites is basically satellite photos while radar information is observed from the radar screens and the synoptic charts are yielded from the drifting buoys and these three types of data are fed into a computer system to analyse and prepare the weather news for broadcasting. After that, the weather, the news is broadcasted in different public media like televisions, radios and telephones. The final information regarding the weather is provided to the public via TV news, radio broadcasting and as a recorded announcement in devices like telephones.
The
given
diagram
shows
how the
weather
information
is collected
by Australian Bureau of Meteorology to provide accurate and updated
weather
forecasting. As
is observed
from the
given
illustration, the
weather
information
collection
is done
via satellites,
radars
and drifting buoys and then
analysed
before
broadcasting them to the public.

As
is presented
in the diagram, the
weather
information
is collected
using three
different
types of sources
namely
, satellites,
radars
and drifting buoys. The raw data collected from satellites is
basically
satellite photos while
radar
information
is observed
from the
radar
screens and the synoptic charts
are yielded
from the drifting buoys and these three types of data
are fed
into a computer system to
analyse
and prepare the
weather
news for broadcasting.

After that, the
weather
, the news
is broadcasted
in
different
public media like televisions, radios and telephones. The final
information
regarding the
weather
is provided
to the public via TV news, radio broadcasting and as a recorded announcement in devices like telephones.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts. v. 1

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  American English
3 paragraphs
165 words
6.0
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