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The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecast. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v.2

The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecast. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v. 2
The given diagram depicts the information about the Australian Bureau of Meteorology produces reliable forecast by collecting minute information on the weather. In order to produce reliable forecast the whole process is divided into four stages that is Incoming Information, Analysis and Forecasting, Preparing the Broadcast and Delivering the Broadcast. The incoming information is received through the satellite, radars, and drifting buoy. These data from this receivers is analysed by the satellite photos, radar screens and the synoptic charts which are an important part of the analysis and forecasting. The analysed information is then passed to the computer which prepares for the necessary broadcast. The broadcasting of this minute information on the weather is done by the TV newsreaders, radios and record announcement. Thus, the diagram insights that the reason for the up to time information on the weather by the Australian Bureau of Meteorology is the co-ordination among the various stages of the reliable weather forecasting.
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about the Australian Bureau of Meteorology produces reliable forecast by collecting minute
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information
on the weather.

In order to produce reliable forecast the whole process
is divided
into four stages
that is
Incoming
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Information
, Analysis and Forecasting, Preparing the Broadcast and Delivering the Broadcast. The incoming
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information
is received
through the satellite, radars, and drifting buoy. These data from
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this
receivers is
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analysed
by the satellite photos, radar screens and the synoptic charts which are an
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important
part of the analysis and forecasting.

The
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analysed
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information
is then passed to the computer which prepares for the necessary broadcast. The broadcasting of this minute
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information
on the weather
is done
by the TV newsreaders, radios and record announcement.

Thus
, the diagram insights that the reason for the up to time
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information
on the weather by the Australian Bureau of Meteorology is the co-ordination among the various stages of the reliable weather forecasting.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecast. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
157 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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