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Write a letter to your manager complaining about the parking problems and suggest some solution What are the problems Why should solve the problems How to solve the problems v.2

Write a letter to your manager complaining about the parking problems and suggest some solution What are the problems Why should solve the problems How to solve the problems v. 2
Dear Sir, I am Bharat Prajapati, working as a full-time employee in IT department of Matrix Solutions as a Network Engineer. I am writing this letter to grievance regarding vehicle parking issue since long time. Our office building has no any parking space. Therefor, all staff suffer where to park own vehicle. Our firm located at the centre of town and it is congested too. Moreover, locality is too posh as I can not afford higher rent to stay near to office. Thus, i rented a flat outside the city at where rent is cheaper than this place. Apart from this public transportation stoppage is also far away from our location so, we have to board an auto and sometimes have to walk due to long queue in hiring an auto and reach office with low energy. Our organization has more than fifty number of staff who suffer daily due to unavailable of parking space. Few colleagues stopped drive to office in their personal vehicle due to space issue and getting late intermittently to reach at office. Near to our building at walking distance there is one open space of private owner. I know him very well and he has no any plan to build anything in near future so we can rent that space for parking. I hope to solve this issue very soon. Yours Sincerely, Bharat Prajapati.
Dear Sir,

I am Bharat
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Prajapati
, working as a full-time employee in IT department of Matrix Solutions as a Network Engineer. I am writing this letter to grievance regarding vehicle parking issue since long time.

Our
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office
building has
Did you mean "now" (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
no
any parking
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space
. Therefor, all staff suffer where to park
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own
vehicle. Our firm located at the
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centre
of town and it
is congested
too.
Moreover
, locality is too posh as I can not afford higher rent to stay near to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
office
.
Thus
,
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i
rented a flat outside the city at where rent is cheaper than this place. Apart from this public transportation stoppage is
also
far away from our location
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so
, we
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have to
board an auto and
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sometimes
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have to
walk due to long queue in hiring an auto and reach
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office
with low energy.

Our organization has more than fifty number of staff who suffer daily due to unavailable of parking
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space
. Few colleagues
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stopped
drive to
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office
in their personal vehicle due to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
space
issue and getting late
intermittently
to reach at office.

Near to our building at walking distance there is one open
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
space
of private owner. I know him
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
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well and
he has
Did you mean "now" (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
no
any plan to build anything in near future
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so
we can rent that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
space
for parking.

I hope to solve this issue
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very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Bharat
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Prajapati
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3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS academic Write a letter to your manager complaining about the parking problems and suggest some solution What are the problems Why should solve the problems How to solve the problems v. 2

Academic
  American English
8 paragraphs
229 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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