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the graph and table show info about water use worldwide and water consumption in 2 countries. v.2

the graph and table show info about water use worldwide and water consumption in 2 countries. v. 2
The charts illustrate how much of water was used for agriculture, industry and homes all over the world, and water consumption in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo in 2000. Overall, it is apparent that global water consumption was seen a significant growth over the period from 1900 to 2000, in which agriculture accounted for the highest proportion of water used. Another interesting point is that water consumption was much higher in Brazil than that in the Congo. Looking at the detail, in 1900, around 500 km3 of water was used by the agriculture sector, while the figures for the industrial and domestic water consumption were only one-fifth of that amount. By 2000, there was a considerable climb in the water needs of the agriculture sector, reach a high of about 3000 km3. Likewise, in terms of the industrial and domestic water used, the proportions slightly rose to approximately a half and one-sixth of that amount, respectively. In the year 2000, Brazil had 176 million population compared with just 5. 2 million population of the Congo. Due to having 26. 5 times more irrigated land in Brazil than in the Congo, water consumption per person in Brazil, at 359 m3, was much higher than that in the Congo, at only 8 m3.
The charts illustrate how much of
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, industry and homes all over the world, and
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consumption
in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo in 2000.

Overall
, it is apparent that global
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consumption
was
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a significant growth over the period from 1900 to 2000, in which
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accounted for the highest proportion of
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used
. Another interesting point is that
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consumption
was much higher in Brazil than that in the Congo.

Looking at the detail, in 1900, around 500 km3 of
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was
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used
by the
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agriculture
sector, while the figures for the industrial and domestic
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were
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one-fifth of that amount. By 2000, there was a considerable climb in the
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needs of the
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agriculture
sector, reach a high of about 3000 km3.
Likewise
, in terms of the industrial and domestic
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used
, the proportions
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rose to approximately a half and one-sixth of that amount,
respectively
.

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5. 2 million population of the Congo. Due to having 26. 5 times more irrigated land in Brazil than in the Congo,
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per person in Brazil, at 359 m3, was much higher than that in the Congo, at
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only
8 m3.
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IELTS academic the graph and table show info about water use worldwide and water consumption in 2 countries. v. 2

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