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The bar graph compares the amount of coffee and meat consumed each year by Norway, France, Germany, USA, Russia, China and Japan. v.2

The bar graph compares the amount of coffee and meat consumed each year by Norway, France, Germany, USA, Russia, China and Japan. v. 2
The given bar graph compares the quantity of coffee and meat (in kg per person) consumption by 7 countries. As it is clear from graph, coffee consumption is far less than meat in all countries. USA is having highest consumption of about 122 kg per person and closely followed by Germany with 87 kg per person. In Russia, Japan and China the meat consumption is less than 50 kg per person. France and Norway are having about 72 and 60 person per kg respectively. Norway is having highest coffee consumption rate of about 9 kg per person when compared to other countries, Germany is in second place with 7 kg per person consumption. All other countries having less than or equal to 5 kg per person consumption. To recapitulate, Meat consumed in larger amount in all countries and, while amount of coffee consumption is very much less.
The
given
bar graph compares the quantity of
coffee
and
meat
(in kg per
person)
consumption
by 7 countries.

As it is
clear
from graph,
coffee
consumption
is far
less
than
meat
in all
countries
. USA is
having
highest
consumption
of about 122 kg per
person
and
closely
followed by Germany with 87 kg per
person
. In Russia, Japan and China the
meat
consumption
is
less
than 50 kg per
person
. France and Norway are
having
about 72 and 60
person
per kg
respectively
.

Norway is
having
highest
coffee
consumption
rate of about 9 kg per
person
when compared to other
countries
, Germany is in second place with 7 kg per
person
consumption
. All other
countries
having
less
than or equal to 5 kg per
person
consumption.

To recapitulate,
Meat
consumed in larger amount in all
countries
and, while amount of
coffee
consumption
is
very
much
less
.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar graph compares the amount of coffee and meat consumed each year by Norway, France, Germany, USA, Russia, China and Japan. v. 2

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