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You want to join a new gym in your neighbourhood Write a letter to the gym s manager In your letter ask what types of membership there are and what the prices are ask what activities are available ask what the procedure is for joining v.2

You want to join a new gym in your neighbourhood Write a letter to the gym s manager In your letter ask what types of membership there are and what the prices are ask what activities are available ask what the procedure is for joining v. 2
Dear Sir, Since the day I arrived to this place, I have been hearing lot about your gym popularity. But, unfortunately due to the job work commitment could not get enough time to join personally. However, from the next week onwards as I would be having some leisure time in the evening, I am very much interested to join your gym. Actually, before that I have certain queries in my mind for which I need your help. Firstly, what are the different kinds of memberships that your gym offers? How much each of these memberships cost? Moreover, what is the minimum and maximum duration one can avails the membership. Undeniably, most of the gyms nowadays, provide some basic gym facilities like yoga, physical exercises and aerobics. Is the same kind of facilities are available in your gym or you provide only the basic activities. As I am new to this place, so not sure what are the normal processes that are required for joining as a member. Additionally, is there any kind of address proof required for the joining? I would be thankful, if you could help to answer these basic questions for me. I look forward to hearing soon from you. Yours Faithfully Michael
Dear Sir,

Since the day I arrived to this place, I have been hearing lot about your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gym
popularity.
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But
, unfortunately due to the job work commitment could not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
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enough
time to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
personally
.

However
, from the
next
week onwards as I would be having
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
leisure time in the evening, I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much interested to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gym
. Actually,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
that I have certain queries in my mind for which I need your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
.
Firstly
, what are the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
kinds of memberships that your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gym
offers? How much each of these memberships cost?
Moreover
, what is the minimum and maximum duration one can
The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "avail"
avails
the membership.

Undeniably
, most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gyms
nowadays, provide
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
basic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gym
facilities like yoga, physical exercises and aerobics. Is the same kind of facilities are available in your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gym
or you provide
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the basic activities.

As I am new to this place,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
not sure what are the normal processes that
are required
for joining as a member.
Additionally
, is there any kind of address proof required for the joining? I would be thankful, if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to answer these basic questions for me.

I look forward to hearing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
from you.

Yours
Faithfully


Michael
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS academic You want to join a new gym in your neighbourhood Write a letter to the gym s manager In your letter ask what types of membership there are and what the prices are ask what activities are available ask what the procedure is for joining v. 2

Academic
  American English
8 paragraphs
204 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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