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Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. v.2

Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. v. 2
Dear Sir, I am John Smith, currently working as software engineer in United Kingdom. Recently I red about your seminar of ethical hacking, scheduled to be held in Sydney, Australia in March 2020, through an advertisement in the newspaper. I am planning to attend this workshop and need some further details. The seminar schedule was not mentioned in the advert. Hence, could you please provide me the duration and the schedule of the workshop. It would be really great if you could brief the program like which are the aspects of ethical hacking will be covered as part of workshop and if there will be any hands-on or it will just be a theory session. Please inform me how much it would cost to book my seat. Lastly, as I am travelling from UK, could you please let me know about the accommodation arrangement. Is there any living place provided by you? If not, could you please let me know the hotels nearby along with the probable cost including meals. Thank you in advance from the bottom of my heart. Yours faithfully, John Smith
Dear Sir,

I am John Smith,
currently
working as software engineer
in United Kingdom
. Recently I red about your seminar of ethical hacking, scheduled to
be held
in Sydney, Australia in March 2020, through an advertisement in the newspaper. I am planning to attend this workshop and need
some
further
details
.

The seminar schedule was not mentioned in the advert.
Hence
, could you
please
provide me the duration and the schedule of the workshop. It would be
really
great if you could brief the program like which are the aspects of ethical hacking will
be covered
as part of workshop and if there will be any hands-on or it will
just
be a theory session.
Please
inform me how much it would cost to book my seat.

Lastly
, as I am travelling from UK, could you
please
let
me know about the accommodation arrangement. Is there any living place provided by you? If not, could you
please
let
me know the hotels nearby along with the probable cost including meals.

Thank you in advance from the bottom of my heart.

Yours
faithfully
,

John Smith
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. v. 2

Academic
  American English
7 paragraphs
183 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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