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The line graph below gives information about the percentage of women aged 15-64 in employment between 2003 and 2009. v.4

The line graph below gives information about the percentage of women aged 15-64 in employment between 2003 and 2009. v. 4
The provided line graph compares the proportion of females who were from 15 to 64 years old having a job in five different nations from 2003 to 2009. It is clear that the percentage of women who were in workforce in Iceland slightly decreased while there were a general increase in other countries over the period shown. Overall, the proportion of working women in Turkey was always the lowest. In 2003, over 80% women in Iceland were in employment, compared to under 70% of Canadians. The proportion of employed 15-to-64-year-old female Germans was just under 60%. The figures for Chile and Turkey were lower than other nations, roughly at 35% and 25% respectively. After 6 years later, only Iceland had a fall in rate of women who got a job in this aged group, to under 80%. The period from 2003 to 2009 witnessed a slightly rise in female’s workforce in Germany and Chile, at around 65% and over 40% respectively. Turkey saw a mild decline in figure from 2003 to 2005, over 20% women in employment.
The provided line graph compares the proportion of females who were from 15 to 64 years
old
having a job in five
different
nations from 2003 to 2009.

It is
clear
that the percentage of
women
who were in workforce in Iceland
slightly
decreased while there were a general increase in other countries
over
the period shown.
Overall
, the proportion of working
women
in Turkey was always the lowest.

In 2003,
over
80%
women
in Iceland were in employment, compared to under 70% of Canadians. The proportion of employed 15-to-64-year-
old
female Germans was
just
under 60%. The figures for Chile and Turkey were lower than other nations, roughly at 35% and 25%
respectively
.

After 6 years later,
only
Iceland had a fall in rate of
women
who
got
a job in this aged group, to under 80%. The period from 2003 to 2009 witnessed a
slightly rise
in female’s workforce in Germany and Chile, at around 65% and
over
40%
respectively
. Turkey
saw
a mild decline in figure from 2003 to 2005,
over
20%
women
in employment.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The line graph below gives information about the percentage of women aged 15-64 in employment between 2003 and 2009. v. 4

Academic
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4 paragraphs
177 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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