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The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.
The diagram explains the way in which bricks are made for the building industry. Overall, there are seven stages in the process, beginning with the digging up of clay and culminating in delivery. To begin, the clay used to make the bricks is dug up from the ground by a large digger. This clay is then placed onto a metal grid, which is used to break up the clay into smaller pieces. A roller assists in this process. Following this, sand and water are added to the clay, and this mixture is turned into bricks by either placing it into a mould or using a wire cutter. Next, these bricks are placed in an oven to dry for 24 – 48 hours. In the subsequent stage, the bricks go through a heating and cooling process. They are heated in a kiln at a moderate and then a high temperature (ranging from 200c to 1300c), followed by a cooling process in a chamber for 2 – 3 days. Finally, the bricks are packed and delivered to their destinations.
The diagram
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explains
the way in which
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bricks
are made
for the building industry.
Overall
, there are seven stages in the process, beginning with the digging up of
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clay
and culminating in delivery.

To
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begin
, the
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clay
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used
to
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make
the
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bricks
is dug
up from the ground by a large digger. This
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clay
is then placed onto a metal grid, which is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to break up the
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clay
into smaller pieces. A roller assists in this process.

Following this, sand and water are
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added
to the
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clay
, and this mixture
is turned
into
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bricks
by either placing it into a
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mould
or using a wire cutter.
Next
, these
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bricks
are placed
in an oven to dry for 24 – 48 hours.

In the subsequent stage, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bricks
go through a heating and cooling process. They
are heated
in a kiln at a moderate and then a high temperature (ranging from 200c to 1300c), followed by a cooling process in a chamber for 2 – 3 days.
Finally
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bricks
are packed
and delivered to their destinations.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
177 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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