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Visitor spend every year from 1996 to 2014 by tourist in 5 countries including Australia, USA, UK, Japan and China. Units are measured in NZ$. v.2

Visitor spend every year from 1996 to 2014 by tourist in 5 countries including Australia, USA, UK, Japan and China. Units are measured in NZ$. v. 2
The line graph illustrates the visitor spend every year from 1996 to 2014 by tourist in 5 countries including Australia, USA, UK, Japan and China. Units are measured in NZ$. Generally, during this period, annual expenditure spend increased in all 5 countries. Among them, Australian spending was by far the highest number as opposed to the lowest in China. In 1996, Chinese spent the least money visiting with New Zealand with approximately 50 NZ$ per visitor whereas the Australian afforded 1050 NZ$ that is 21 times larger than Chinese. The other 3 countries had the spending above 400NZ$ including around 450NZ$ in UK and Japan, 750NZ$ in USA. In the next period, the expenditure fluctuated among countries. In 2004, total money afforded by Chinese exceeded that of the UK. However, until 2014, China turned back to the country spending less travelling New Zealand with only 400NZ$ per visitor and Australia was the most generous spender who pay up to 2000NZ$ annually for for New Zealand visits.
The line graph illustrates the visitor spend every year from 1996 to 2014 by tourist in 5
countries
including Australia, USA, UK, Japan and China. Units
are measured
in
NZ$
.

Generally
, during this period, annual expenditure spend increased in all 5
countries
. Among them, Australian spending was by far the highest number as opposed to the lowest in China.

In 1996, Chinese spent the least money visiting with New Zealand with approximately 50
NZ$
per visitor whereas the Australian afforded 1050
NZ$
that is
21 times larger than Chinese. The other 3
countries
had the spending above 400NZ$ including around 450NZ$ in UK and Japan, 750NZ$
in USA
.

In the
next
period, the expenditure fluctuated among
countries
. In 2004, total money afforded by Chinese exceeded that of the UK.
However
, until 2014, China turned back to the
country
spending less travelling New Zealand with
only
400NZ$ per visitor and Australia was the most generous spender who pay up to 2000NZ$
annually
for for
New Zealand visits.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic Visitor spend every year from 1996 to 2014 by tourist in 5 countries including Australia, USA, UK, Japan and China. Units are measured in NZ$. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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