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The chart below shows the total number of minutes in billions of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories from 1995 2002 v.1

The chart below shows the total number of minutes in billions of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories from 1995 2002 v. 1
The chart below indicates changes in the amount of time spent in three diferent telephone call over 7 years from 1995 to 2002. In terms of local – fixed line, in 1995, local – fixed line telephone call had the most popupar call in the UK, with around 72 billion minutes spent. This rate witnessed a significant rose and reached a peak of 90 billions minnute in 1990 before falling sharply to around 72 billion minnutes in the last year to become the highest of all. When it comes to Mobiles phone call and National and international – fixed line. There were a up ward trend of the number of time spending in the UK. At the start of the period, around 38 billion minnutes of National and international – fixedline was spent. This figure increased steadily to 60 billion minnutes to become the second highest of all in 2002. While standing at much lower, the number of time of mobiles phone using was around 2 minnute (billions) in 1995. This rate grew gradually to around 46 minnute (billions) in the next 7 years.
The chart below indicates
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in the amount of time spent in three
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over 7 years from 1995 to 2002.

In terms of local
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fixed
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had the most
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popupar
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in the UK, with
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around
72
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billion
minutes spent. This rate witnessed a significant rose and reached a peak of 90
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billions
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minnute
in 1990
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72
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minnutes
in the last year to become the highest of all.

When it
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to Mobiles phone
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call
and National and international
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fixed
line. There were
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up ward trend of the number of time spending in the UK. At the
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start
of the period,
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38
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billion
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minnutes
of National and international
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fixedline
was spent
. This figure increased
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billion
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minnutes
to become the second highest of all in 2002. While standing at much lower, the number of time of mobiles phone using was
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around
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minnute
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(billions)
in 1995. This rate grew
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46
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minnute
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the total number of minutes in billions of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories from 1995 2002 v. 1

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