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The table shows the number of overseas students enrolling in language schools in Australia between 1996 and 1998 and the geographical area from where they come. v.2

The table shows the number of overseas students enrolling in language schools in Australia between 1996 and 1998 and the geographical area from where they come. v. 2
The given table illustrates about the number of students admitted to study at various language schools in Australia every year from 1996 to 1998. The students are mentioned to be hailed from 4 different continents. In overall, the table states that Asian students are the maximum in number in getting admitted into the language schools. However, this number faced atrophy gradually till the year 1998. The Asian students' population was at it' s peak in the year 1996 with almost 65, 000 students but eventually got decreased to almost 43, 000 students in the year 1998. European, Central and South American students' population follows the same trends of each other' s. Initially in the year 1996 with the population of 6. 6 thousand, 839 students respectively, the Europe and Central and South American students' populations reach their respective apogees of 8 thousand and 1392 students respectively in the year 1997. However, both populations get decreased to 4. 3 thousand as well as 1345 in the year 1998. The African students admission for the language schools was began in the year 1997 where it' s first batch had 126 students. This number was increased to 499 in the next year 1998. However, as the number of Asian students predominates (almost 85% every year), only the changes in the population of Asian students' population effects the total population significantly.
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given
table illustrates about the
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number
of
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students
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admitted to study
at various language schools in Australia every
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year
from 1996 to 1998. The
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students
are mentioned
to
be hailed
from 4
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different
continents.

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overall
, the table states that Asian
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students
are the maximum in
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number
in getting admitted into the language schools.
However
, this
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number
faced atrophy
gradually
till the
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year
1998. The Asian
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students&
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population
was at
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it&
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year
1996 with almost 65, 000
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students
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but
eventually
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got
decreased to almost 43, 000
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students
in the
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year
1998.

European, Central and South American
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students&
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population
follows the same trends of each
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other&
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in the
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year
1996 with the
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population
of 6. 6 thousand, 839
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students
respectively
, the Europe and Central and South American
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students&
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populations
reach their respective apogees of 8 thousand and 1392
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students
respectively
in the
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year
1997.
However
, both
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populations
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get
decreased to 4. 3 thousand
as well
as 1345 in the
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year
1998.

The African
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students
admission for the language schools was
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began
in the
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year
1997 where
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it&
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first
batch had 126
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students
. This
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number
was increased
to 499 in the
next
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year
1998.
However
, as the
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number
of Asian
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students
predominates (almost 85% every
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year)
,
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only
the
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changes
in the
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population
of Asian
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students&
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population
effects the total
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population
significantly
.
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37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS academic The table shows the number of overseas students enrolling in language schools in Australia between 1996 and 1998 and the geographical area from where they come. v. 2

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6.0
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