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UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008 v.2

UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008 v. 2
The bar chart gives information about UK graduate and postgraduate students who prefer other activities rather than full-time work after graduated from college in 2008. There were 3 kinds of activity will be figured out with full time work such as an exception. Overall, as can be seen that the biggest amount of graduates activity was obviously in further study likewise similar with the postgraduates trend which showed that the most of them decided to further their study markedly. Regarding to the data, grads occupation which the most postive movement had to be in further education for the graduates which reached at 29. 665 grads whilst similar case in postgraduates, the master grads mostly continued their study and it totally got at 2. 725 grads. The second highest career path of bachelor happened to get contracted to take part-time job which at 17. 735 grads markedly. Same case as in postgraduates, they also chose tp obtain part-time job and counted at 2. 535 grads respectively. Another career option, a part of graduates contributed their selves in voluntary which tabulated at 3. 500 grads whilst the master grads who decided to be in boluntary happened to be 10 times lower than the bachelor grads’. Unlike with the former career destinations, some of the bachelor and master grads determined to be unemployed but just at 1. 625 for ghe postgraduates and 10 times higher for the graduates.
The bar chart gives information about UK
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graduate
and
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students who prefer other activities
rather
than full-time work after graduated from college in 2008. There were 3 kinds of activity will
be figured
out with full time work such as an exception.
Overall
, as can be
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seen
that the biggest amount of
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graduates
activity was
obviously
in
further
study
likewise
similar with the
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postgraduates
trend which
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showed
that the most of them decided to
further
their study
markedly
.

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the data,
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grads
occupation which the most
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postive
movement had to be in
further
education for the
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graduates
which reached at 29. 665
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grads
whilst similar case in
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postgraduates
, the master
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grads
mostly
continued their study and it
totally
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got
at 2. 725
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grads
. The second highest career path of bachelor happened to
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get
contracted to
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take part
-time job which at 17. 735
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grads
markedly
. Same case as in
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postgraduates
, they
also
chose
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obtain part-time job and counted at 2. 535
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grads
respectively
.

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graduates
contributed their selves in voluntary which tabulated at 3. 500
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grads
whilst the master
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grads
who decided to be in
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boluntary
happened to be 10 times lower than the bachelor
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grads’
. Unlike with the former career destinations,
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some of the
bachelor and master
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determined to
be unemployed
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just
at 1. 625 for
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postgraduates
and 10 times higher for the
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.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS academic UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008 v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
235 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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