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The line diagram outlines information about the number of clients of five correspondence administrations worldwide through the span of 10 years beginning from 1998 v.1

The line diagram outlines information about the number of clients of five correspondence administrations worldwide through the span of 10 years beginning from 1998 v. 1
The line graph illustrates data about the number of users of five communication services worldwide over the course of 10 years starting from 1998 Looking at the graph, it can be seen that all services experienced some growth over the 10 years period, with cellular phone and Internet services rising the most growth and becoming the most popular forms of communication In 1998, the amount of landline service user was the highest at about 15%, while the figures for cell phone and internet services were approximately 4% and 3%, respectively. Over the following four years, cell phone service strongly rose and equal to the increase of landline service at around 17%. In the same time, the remaining service recorded the development going to approximately 10%. Since 2002, the number of people using the cell phone flew up like a rocket and reached a peak of 65% population of the world. Meanwhile, the other two services increased and similar to around 20% of the number of people in the world in 2008 From 1998 to 2002, In two arrays of fixed broadband and mobile broadband was almost nobody to use. The figures for these two services slightly rose to rough 5% of the population by the last year.
The line graph illustrates data about the number of users of five communication
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services
worldwide over the course of 10 years starting from 1998

Looking at the graph, it can be
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seen
that all
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services
experienced
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some
growth over the 10 years period, with cellular
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phone
and Internet
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services
rising the most growth and becoming the most popular forms of communication

In 1998, the amount of landline
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service
user was the highest at about 15%, while the figures for cell
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phone
and internet
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services
were approximately 4% and 3%,
respectively
. Over the following four years, cell
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phone
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service
strongly
rose and equal to the increase of landline
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service
at around 17%. In the same time, the remaining
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service
recorded the development going to approximately 10%. Since 2002, the number of
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people
using the cell
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phone
flew up like a rocket and reached a peak of 65% population of the world. Meanwhile, the other two
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services
increased and similar to around 20% of the number of
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people
in the world in 2008

From 1998 to 2002, In two arrays of
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fixed
broadband and mobile broadband was almost nobody to
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use
. The figures for these two
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services
slightly
rose to rough 5% of the population by the last
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year
.
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IELTS academic The line diagram outlines information about the number of clients of five correspondence administrations worldwide through the span of 10 years beginning from 1998 v. 1

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4 paragraphs
207 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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