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The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. v.1

The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. v. 1
The charts illustrate the number of graduate and post-graduate students did after completing their course in a college excluding full-time work in the UK in the year 2008. Overall, both the graduate and post-graduate scholar had a maximum number of students attending further study, and the least number of students were engaged in voluntary work. Also, the count of graduates was too large than post-graduates. According to the first bar chart, approximately 30, 000 graduate students were planning for further study in 2008. Where the number of part-time workers and unemployed were likely to be same, they were just above 15, 000. A tiny number of people (3500) were active in voluntary works. Again, from the second chart, like graduates, a significant number of post-graduates scholars were doing further study, which is nearly ten times lesser than graduate. But, the part-time worker accounted for 2535 people, that was the second choice for the students. In addition, 1625 of them were unemployed that year, the count for a volunteer was below 500
The charts illustrate the
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graduate
and post-graduate
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students
did after completing their course in a college excluding full-time work in the UK in the year 2008.

Overall
, both the
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graduate
and post-graduate scholar had a maximum
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number
of
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students
attending
further
study, and the least
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number
of
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students
were engaged
in voluntary work.
Also
, the count of
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graduates
was too
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large
than post-graduates.

According to the
first
bar chart, approximately 30, 000
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graduate
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students
were planning for
further
study in 2008. Where the
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number
of part-time workers and unemployed were likely to be same, they were
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just
above 15, 000. A tiny
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number
of
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people
(3500) were active in voluntary works.

Again, from the second chart, like
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graduates
, a significant
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number
of post-graduates scholars were doing
further
study, which is
nearly
ten times lesser than
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graduate
.
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But
, the part-time worker accounted for 2535
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people
, that was the second choice for the
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students
.
In addition
, 1625 of them
were unemployed
that year, the count for a volunteer was below 500
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17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. v. 1

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4 paragraphs
170 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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