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This pie charts illustrate the ratio of three different groups of citizens( 0-14 years, 15-59 years, 60+ years) who lived In Yemen and Italy in 2000 and who will live in 2050. v.2

This pie charts illustrate the ratio of three different groups of citizens( 0-14 years, 15-59 years, 60+ years) who lived In Yemen and Italy in 2000 and who will live in 2050. v. 2
This pie charts illustrate the ratio of three different groups of citizens( 0-14 years, 15-59 years, 60+ years) who lived In Yemen and Italy in 2000 and who will live in 2050. Overall, there were considerably more children in Yemen than in Italy in 2000, on the contrary Italy outnumbered Yemen in the number of people who over sixty. Furthermore, the percentage of retired people will increase in Italy in 2050 year, while the number of children will decrease in Yemen. According to the carts, there will be significantly changes in number of Italian who older than sixty, 24% in 2000 and 42. 3% in 2050 retrospectively. At the same time the number of Yemen old people will rise slightly. The number of children who live in Yemen will decline by 2050 and changes from 50% to 37%, for the benefit for 15-59 years group, the number of people there will grow more than 10%. In Italy the number of children will decline by 3%.
This pie charts illustrate the ratio of three
different
groups of citizens
(
0-14 years, 15-59 years, 60+ years)
who
lived
In Yemen and Italy in 2000 and
who
will
live
in 2050.

Overall
, there were
considerably
more
children
in Yemen than in Italy in 2000,
on the contrary
Italy outnumbered Yemen in the
number
of
people
who
over sixty.
Furthermore
, the percentage of retired
people
will increase in Italy in 2050
year
, while the
number
of
children
will decrease in Yemen.

According to the carts, there will be
significantly
changes
in
number
of Italian
who
older than sixty, 24% in 2000 and 42. 3% in 2050
retrospectively
. At the same time the
number
of Yemen
old
people
will rise
slightly
.

The
number
of
children
who
live
in Yemen will decline by 2050 and
changes
from 50% to 37%, for the benefit for 15-59 years group, the
number
of
people
there will grow more than 10%.

In Italy the
number
of
children
will decline by 3%.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic This pie charts illustrate the ratio of three different groups of citizens( 0-14 years, 15-59 years, 60+ years) who lived In Yemen and Italy in 2000 and who will live in 2050. v. 2

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