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Test 3 Cam 9 The charts below give Information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy In 2000 and projections for 2050 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

Test 3 Cam 9 The charts below give Information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy In 2000 and projections for 2050
The pie charts illustrate the variation in the percentage of the habitats living in Yemen and Italy according to age in 2002 and estimation for 2050 It is clear that Italy had the oldest age group in the year 2000, and that the same is predicted for the year 2050. Populations aged over 60 in both countries are estimated upward trends over the fifty-year period. In the year 2000, just over half of the population in Yemen was aged 14 or under, while the majority of Italians fell into the 15-59 age group, with 61. 6 %, followed by the youngest group, taking up merely 14. 3%. Furthermore, people aged 60 and over accounted for almost a quarter of the Italian population, but only 3. 6% of the inhabitants of Yemen. By 2050, the proportion of children aged under 15 in both countries is predicted to drop, most noticeably in Yemen where the figure is estimated to decrease by 13. 1%. On the other hand, elderly people is projected to increase, by 2. 1% in Yemen and a massive 18. 2% in Italy. Finally, it is anticipated that the 15-59 age group will rise by around 10% in Yemen, but shrink by around 15% in Italy.
The pie charts illustrate the variation in the percentage of the habitats living in Yemen and Italy according to
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age
in 2002 and estimation for 2050

It is
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clear
that Italy had the oldest
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age
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group
in the year 2000, and that the same
is predicted
for the year 2050. Populations
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aged
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over
60 in both countries
are estimated
upward trends
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over
the fifty-year period.

In the year 2000,
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just
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over
half of the population in Yemen was
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aged
14 or under, while the majority of Italians fell into the 15-59
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age
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group
, with 61. 6 %, followed by the youngest
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group
, taking up
merely
14. 3%.
Furthermore
,
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people
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aged
60 and
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over
accounted for almost a quarter of the Italian population,
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but
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only
3. 6% of the inhabitants of Yemen.

By 2050, the proportion of children
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aged
under 15 in both countries
is predicted
to drop, most
noticeably
in Yemen where the figure
is estimated
to decrease by 13. 1%.
On the other hand
, elderly
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people
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is
projected to increase, by 2. 1% in Yemen and a massive 18. 2% in Italy.
Finally
, it
is anticipated
that the 15-59
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age
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group
will rise by around 10% in Yemen,
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but
shrink by around 15% in Italy.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic Test 3 Cam 9 The charts below give Information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy In 2000 and projections for 2050

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
206 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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