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The given pie charts show data on the population ages in Yemen and Italy in the year 2000 and also projected these portions of the population for the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons wh v.2

The given pie charts show data on the population ages in Yemen and Italy in the year 2000 and also projected these portions of the population for the year 2050.
The charts below illustrate the data about the age distribution of Yemen and Italy in 2000 compare to 2050. In a glance, most pf the population of Yemen was between 0 to 15 years which will decrease in 2050. In contrast, it was between 15 to 59 years for Italy, which is predicted to go down in 2050. 50. 1% of Yemeni were between 0 to 14 years in 2000 which is estimated to decrease and get to 37% in 2050. On the other hand, there were 46. 3% in age 15 to 59 which will increase to 57. 3% in 2050. Moreover, there were only 3. 6 percent of people more than 60 years in 2000 which is projected to change a little and go up to reach 5. 7% in 2050. Most of the Italian (61. 6%) were between 15 to 59 years in 2000 which will dramatically reduce to 46. 2% in 2050. In contrast, there were 24. 1% of 0 to 14 years in 2000 by a sharply surge in 2050. In addition, more than 60 years old people were 14. 3% in 2000 which is predicted to face a little fall and reach to 11. 5% in 2050.
The charts below illustrate the data about the age distribution of Yemen and Italy in 2000 compare to 2050. In a glance, most pf the population of Yemen was
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 0 and 15".
between 0 to 15
years which will decrease in 2050.
In contrast
, it was
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 15 and 59".
between 15 to 59
years for Italy, which
is predicted
to go down in 2050.

50. 1% of Yemeni were
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 0 and 14".
between 0 to 14
years in 2000 which
is estimated
to decrease and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to 37% in 2050.
On the other hand
, there were 46. 3% in age 15 to 59 which will increase to 57. 3% in 2050.
Moreover
, there were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
3. 6 percent of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
more than 60 years in 2000 which
is projected
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
and go up to reach 5. 7% in 2050.

Most of the Italian (61. 6%) were
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 15 and 59".
between 15 to 59
years in 2000 which will
dramatically
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
to 46. 2% in 2050.
In contrast
, there were 24. 1% of 0 to 14 years in 2000 by a
You used an adverb ('sharply') instead of an adjective, or a noun ('surge') instead of another adjective.
sharply surge
in 2050.
In addition
, more than 60 years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
were 14. 3% in 2000 which
is predicted
to face a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
fall and reach to 11. 5% in 2050.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS academic The given pie charts show data on the population ages in Yemen and Italy in the year 2000 and also projected these portions of the population for the year 2050.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
203 words
6.5
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