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The graph below shows the proportion of the population who use the Internet between 1999 and 2009 in three different countries. v.2

The graph below shows the proportion of the population who use the Internet between 1999 and 2009 in three different countries. v. 2
This line chart illustrates the percentage of people in the USA, Canada and Mexico who using the Internet over 10 years period from 1999. Looking at the information more detail, we can see that in 1999, the percentage of Internet users in America accounted for just under 25% while the Canada and Mexico people accounted for far less proportion, at 10% and 5% respectively. The proportion of the population who use the Internet increased dramatically all the way at the end of the period in the USA and Canada at around 70% for the former and 80% for the latter. It is, however, interesting to note that by the year 2002, the number of Canadian who using the Internet always lower than American, but it increased suddenly and continued to lead over the next 7 years. By contrast, Mexico was developed slower than the other two nations. The proportion of Internet users in Mexico rose gradually over the 10 years period at just under 40% in 2009. Overall, it is clear that although the Internet is increasingly popular in these countries, Mexico was always leading a lower percentage compared to the other developed countries.
This line chart illustrates the percentage of
people
in the USA, Canada and Mexico who using the Internet over 10 years period from 1999.

Looking at the information more detail, we can
see
that in 1999, the percentage of Internet users in America accounted for
just
under 25% while the Canada and Mexico
people
accounted for far less proportion, at 10% and 5%
respectively
. The proportion of the population who
use
the Internet increased
dramatically
all the way at the
end
of the period in the USA and Canada at around 70% for the former and 80% for the latter. It is,
however
, interesting to note that by the year 2002, the number of Canadian who using the Internet always lower than American,
but
it increased
suddenly
and continued to lead over the
next
7 years.

By contrast, Mexico
was developed
slower than the other two nations. The proportion of Internet users in Mexico rose
gradually
over the 10 years period at
just
under 40% in 2009.

Overall
, it is
clear
that although the Internet is
increasingly
popular in these countries, Mexico was always leading a lower percentage compared to the other
developed countries
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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