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The pie graphs below compare the percentages of the population in three different age groups, in two nations, in 2000 and 2050. v.2

The pie graphs below compare the percentages of the population in three different age groups, in two nations, in 2000 and 2050. v. 2
The pie graphs below compare the percentages of the population in three different age groups, in two nations, in 2000 and 2050. Overall, people in both countries are going to grow older in the next 50 years. The age group 0-14 tend to decrease in the future. In 2000, just over half of the population was aged 0-14 in Yemen while this figure was 14. 3% in Italy. People aged 15-59 accounted for 46. 3% and 61. 6%, in Yemen and Italy, respectively. The group age over 60 occupied 3. 6% in Yemen while this figure in Italy was nearly a quarter. In 2050, in Yemen, while people aged 15-59 is expected to grow rapidly from 46. 3% to 57. 3%, the children who aged under 15 will drop dramatically to 37%. In Italy, although the group of age 15-59 is predicted to decrease quickly to 46. 2%, people aged over 60 tend to rise nearly double from 24, 1 % in 2000.
The pie graphs below compare the percentages of the population in three
different
age
groups
, in two nations, in 2000 and 2050.

Overall
,
people
in both countries are going to grow older in the
next
50 years. The
age
group
0-14 tend to decrease in the future.

In 2000,
just
over half of the population was
aged
0-14 in Yemen while this figure was 14. 3% in Italy.
People
aged
15-59 accounted for 46. 3% and 61. 6%, in Yemen and Italy,
respectively
. The
group
age
over 60 occupied 3. 6% in Yemen while this figure in Italy was
nearly
a quarter.

In 2050, in Yemen, while
people
aged
15-59 is
expected
to grow
rapidly
from 46. 3% to 57. 3%, the children who
aged
under 15 will drop
dramatically
to 37%. In Italy, although the
group
of
age
15-59
is predicted
to decrease
quickly
to 46. 2%,
people
aged
over 60 tend to rise
nearly
double from 24, 1 % in 2000.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The pie graphs below compare the percentages of the population in three different age groups, in two nations, in 2000 and 2050. v. 2

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