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This bar chart shows the percentage of Australian graduates on full-time employment four months after graduation, between 1995 and 2001 v.1

This bar chart shows the percentage of Australian graduates on full-time employment four months after graduation, between 1995 and 2001 v. 1
The figure above reveals the results of a survey carried out to determine graduate' s status in full-time employment specific for each gender during these six years period from 1995 to 2001. At the first glance, it can be seen that in the majority of these years men rather than women lucky to get their adequate occupations a part from 2001 which experienced an equal amount for males and females. The highest percentage of this figure devote to the year 2000 for both genders. Approximately, more over 84 percentage of male and just very small under 82 percentage. Nonetheless, this statistic had experienced the least stage at the first year of this research. By the time past, it can be anticipated that for the future phase both males and females reach to a similar point. Maybe for now in which the survey did not gather the data have insignificant erratic behavior.
The figure above reveals the results of a survey carried out to determine
graduate&
#039; s status in full-time employment specific for each gender during these six years period from 1995 to 2001.

At the
first
glance, it can be
seen
that in the majority of these years
men
rather
than women lucky to
get
their adequate occupations a part from 2001 which experienced an equal amount for males and females. The highest percentage of this figure devote to the
year
2000 for both genders. Approximately, more over 84 percentage of male and
just
very
small
under 82 percentage.

Nonetheless, this statistic had experienced the least stage at the
first
year
of this research. By the time past, it can
be anticipated
that for the future phase both males and females reach to a similar point. Maybe for
now
in which the survey did not gather the data have insignificant erratic behavior.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic This bar chart shows the percentage of Australian graduates on full-time employment four months after graduation, between 1995 and 2001 v. 1

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