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The graphs below show the different reasons of two groups of students to choose Dorrifod University. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The given pie charts compare the reasons of ch v.2

The graphs below show the different reasons of two groups of students to choose Dorrifod University.
The rendered charts compare the reasons of choosing dorrifod unversity of distinct age groups which are 18 to 24 and above 25 age group. Overall, it is manifest that both age groups have some similarties and some differences in their reason for opting to study in the given university. In the fleeting glance it is immensely clear that, close to home is most popular reason in given both age groups accounting for 36% and 39% respectively. In contrast course offered is second reason given by age for 18 to 24, which is 35%, the equivalent figure for over 25 age student decrease to just under a quartar. Reason for reputation of teaching staff remain constant in both age groups. Probing further, age groups between 18 and 24 given reason for related to industry comprise of 4% and experience a fourfold in the age group over 25. As oppose to opportunity to study in age groups 18 to 24 aboard stand at 3% as against 9% in the age group over 25. As regard reason for facilities on campus amounting to 14% from 18 to 24 age group, which decrease by 12% in the age groups above 25.
The rendered charts compare the
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reasons
of choosing
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dorrifod
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unversity
of distinct
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age
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groups
which are 18 to 24 and above 25
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age
group.

Overall
, it is manifest that both
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age
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groups
have
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some
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similarties
and
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some
differences in their
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reason
for opting to study in the
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given
university.

In the fleeting glance it is
immensely
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clear
that, close to home is
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most
popular
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reason
in
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given
both
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age
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groups
accounting for 36% and 39%
respectively
. In
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contrast
course offered is second
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reason
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given
by
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age
for 18 to 24, which is 35%, the equivalent figure for over 25
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age
student decrease to
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just
under a
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quartar
.
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Reason
for reputation of teaching staff remain constant in both
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age
groups.

Probing
further
,
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age
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groups
between 18 and 24
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given
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reason
for related to industry
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comprise of
4% and experience a fourfold in the
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age
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group
over 25.
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As oppose to
opportunity to study in
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age
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groups
18 to 24 aboard stand at 3% as against 9% in the
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age
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group
over 25. As regard
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reason
for facilities on campus amounting to 14% from 18 to 24
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age
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group
, which decrease by 12% in the
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age
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groups
above 25.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS academic The graphs below show the different reasons of two groups of students to choose Dorrifod University.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
197 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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