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The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006. v.3

The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006. v. 3
The bar chart compares the percentage of international graduates among various universities in eight different Canadian provinces from 2001 to 2006. Overall, the number of oversea graduates in all provinces increased over the period of 5 years. It also is clear that New Brunswick had the highest number of international graduates over the period as a whole. In 2001, New Brunswick witnessed the highest number of students coming from other countries, at approximately 7%. Nova Scotia and Quebec had the same figure and followed by new Brunswick, at 6%. In 2006, a considerable rise can be seen in the number of oversea graduates in New Brunswick and Nova Scotia, to 12% and just over 10% respectively. The figure for Quebec also rose, to approximately 8%. New Brunswick, however, remained consistently the top level of the number of international graduates. Accounting for nearly 5% in 2001, Both Alberta and BC saw an increase in the number of graduates coming from other countries, at approximately 7% in 2006. Similarly, Manitoba, Newfoundland and Labrador and Ontario accounted for a minor percentage of oversea graduates, at 3% in 2001. Those figures had risen dramatically to around 6% by 2006.
The bar chart compares the percentage of international
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graduates
among various universities in eight
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different
Canadian provinces from 2001 to 2006.
Overall
, the
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number
of oversea
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graduates
in all provinces increased over the period of 5 years. It
also
is
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clear
that
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New
Brunswick had the highest
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number
of international
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graduates
over the period as a whole.

In 2001,
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New
Brunswick witnessed the highest
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number
of students coming from other countries, at approximately 7%. Nova Scotia and Quebec had the same figure and followed by
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new Brunswick
, at 6%. In 2006, a considerable rise can be
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seen
in the
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number
of oversea
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graduates
in
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New
Brunswick and Nova Scotia, to 12% and
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just
over 10%
respectively
. The figure for Quebec
also
rose, to approximately 8%.
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New
Brunswick,
however
, remained
consistently
the
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top level
of the
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number
of international graduates.

Accounting for
nearly
5% in 2001, Both Alberta and BC
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saw
an increase in the
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number
of
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graduates
coming from other countries, at approximately 7% in 2006.
Similarly
, Manitoba, Newfoundland and Labrador and Ontario accounted for a minor percentage of oversea
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graduates
, at 3% in 2001. Those figures had risen
dramatically
to around 6% by 2006.
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