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The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars? v.2

The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars? v. 2
The invention of cars has brought new trend of transporting to the human kind for century. However, the tremendous car use also accompanies several problems to the society. The more cars are used, the more problems arise. One of those is the environmental issue. It has been common knowledge that the exhaust fume produced by car is one contribution to the air pollution and green house gas emissions. Additionally, car overuses creates a huge amount of traffic jam in the rush hours in big cities like London or Shanghai. Another crucial issue brought by cars is safety. The number of people dead by car accidents recorded every year is approximately 1. 3 million people on world wild scale. This is alarming. As many would believe that if the use of cars reduces, the problems addressed by it will also decrease. However, it cannot be denied how useful car is to individual daily life and it is hard to imagine a life without it. Therefore, I think there are other solutions that can be applied. Car manufacturers can produce electricity car or cars that are friendly to the environment. Moreover, governments can build more undergrounds infrastructure like railways or roads to reduce the traffic jam. So, in conclusion, discouraging car use may solved the problem but it is not the best option for the society.
The invention of
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cars
has brought new trend of transporting to the human kind for century.
However
, the tremendous
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car
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use
also
accompanies several
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problems
to the society.

The more
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cars
are
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used
, the more
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problems
arise. One of those is the environmental issue. It has been common knowledge that the exhaust fume produced by
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car
is one contribution to the air pollution and green
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house
gas emissions.
Additionally
,
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car
overuses creates a huge amount of traffic jam in the rush hours in
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big
cities like London or Shanghai. Another crucial issue brought by
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cars
is safety. The number of
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people
dead by
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car
accidents recorded every year is approximately 1. 3 million
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people
on world wild scale. This is alarming.

As
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many
would believe that if the
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use
of
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cars
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reduces
, the
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problems
addressed by it will
also
decrease.
However
, it cannot
be denied
how useful
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car
is to individual daily life and it is
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hard
to imagine a life without it.
Therefore
, I
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think
there are other solutions that can
be applied
.
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Car
manufacturers can produce electricity
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car
or
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cars
that are friendly to the environment.
Moreover
,
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governments
can build more
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undergrounds
infrastructure like railways or roads to
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reduce
the traffic jam.

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So
,
in conclusion
, discouraging
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car
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use
may solved the
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problem
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but
it is not the best option for the society.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS academic The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars? v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
224 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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