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The two pie charts given below describe some eployment patterns in Great Britain in 1992 and the data is calibrate in percentage In general it can be seen that the biggest proportion from male was managerial and profesional and the biggest percentage of F v.2

The two pie charts given below describe some eployment patterns in Great Britain in 1992 and the data is calibrate in percentage In general it can be seen that the biggest proportion from male was managerial and profesional and the biggest percentage of F v. 2
To begin from female in Great Britain in 1992 the highest percentage was clerical or related which had 31%. Followed by managerial and professional as the largest percentage was 29%, and 27% for other manual while the total amount of categories had 13% which were the smallest proportion of all employment patterns. However, looking at the second pie in more detail, managerial and professional was the biggest percentage of male in Great Britain in 1992. It got 36%. Followed by other manual as the second popular categories, it got 26%, and 24% for craft or similar, in stark contrast the total percentage of general and labourers, clerical and related and also other non-manual less than fifth.
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was 29%, and 27% for other manual while the total amount of categories had 13% which were the smallest proportion of all employment patterns.

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IELTS academic The two pie charts given below describe some eployment patterns in Great Britain in 1992 and the data is calibrate in percentage In general it can be seen that the biggest proportion from male was managerial and profesional and the biggest percentage of F v. 2

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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