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The two pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. v.2

The two pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. v. 2
The given circular charts highlight the information about the household expenditures on six distinct factors by a nation during the years: 1950 and 2010. It is a clear and coherent representation. Overall, it is evident that expending on each category had marginally increased except transportation as it was drastically decreased in the last year. It can be seen that during the year 1950, people preferred to spend on housing however, this trend had been drastically declined in the year 2010 to only 22. 0%. Moreover, in regards the percentage of food expenditure in the year 1950 was comparatively low than 2010. Furthermore, health care was the only category in which least amount of expense had been spent by the people. As far as trend was concerned, education comprised of 6. 6% in the first year and then, it had showed only a slight decrease of about a mere 6. 6% to 6. 5% in 2010. Likewise, in the year 1950, transportation consisted of 3. 3% household expenditure which rose significantly to 14. 0% 60 years later.
The
given
circular charts highlight the information about the household expenditures on six distinct factors by a nation during the years: 1950 and 2010. It is a
clear
and coherent representation.

Overall
, it is evident that expending on each category had
marginally
increased except transportation as it was
drastically
decreased in the last year.

It can be
seen
that during the
year
1950,
people
preferred to spend on housing
however
, this trend had been
drastically
declined in the
year
2010 to
only
22. 0%.
Moreover
, in regards the percentage of food expenditure in the
year
1950 was
comparatively
low
than 2010.
Furthermore
, health care was the
only
category in which
least
amount of expense had
been spent
by the
people
.

As far as trend
was concerned
, education comprised of 6. 6% in the
first
year
and then, it had
showed
only
a slight decrease of about a mere 6. 6% to 6. 5% in 2010.
Likewise
, in the
year
1950, transportation consisted of 3. 3% household expenditure which rose
significantly
to 14. 0% 60 years later.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The two pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. v. 2

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176 words
6.5
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