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The two maps below show the changes in town of Denham from 1986 to the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. ’ v.1

The two maps below show the changes in town of Denham from 1986 to the present day.
The both maps reveals the alternations in town of Denham in son of 1986 to the 2019. it is vivid, the first map enumerates the whole land in the east of the river stoke, that land was used for agriculture purposes and there was two shops in side of post office which is now covered up by many homes which are newly built at present moment and it results increment of housing development. post office, bridge and school are still as same as those were in retro time. Furthermore, in 1986 there was an large garden which was used for to see the beauty of farms with landscape of river stroke and there were few large homes that is now converted into retirement home for old age people and half of garden area occupied with new homes development which results the garden now got shortened which is better for elder people. Overall, development of residences in soared in present day because of large population.
The both maps reveals the alternations in town of
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Denham
in son of 1986 to the 2019.

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it
is vivid, the
first
map enumerates the whole land in the east of the river stoke, that land was
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used
for agriculture purposes and
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there was two shops
in side of post office which is
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now
covered up by
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many
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homes
which are
newly
built at present moment and it results increment of housing development.
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post
office, bridge and school are
still
as same as those were in retro time.

Furthermore
, in 1986 there was
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an
large garden which was
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used
for to
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see
the beauty of farms with landscape of river stroke and there were few large
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homes
that is
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now
converted into retirement home for
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old
age
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people
and half of garden area occupied with new
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homes
development which results the garden
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now
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got
shortened which is better for elder
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people
.

Overall
, development of residences
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in soared in
present day
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because
of large population.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The two maps below show the changes in town of Denham from 1986 to the present day.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
164 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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