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the maps below show recent changes in the town of Kimsville. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.3

the maps below show recent changes in the town of Kimsville.
The two maps indicate the main changes which have taken place in the town of Kimsville between the year 2002 and today. Overall, It is noticed that Kimsville has become much more modern city, with more buildings and transport facilities. It can be seen that the west of the city used to be a green area with a lot of trees, but the trees have been cut down to make way for new apartments and football stadium. It has been urbanized since 2002. Another striking change is that a new train station has been constructed, which contribute on developing of transport. If we look at the cinema in 2002, it has been turned into a pub, where makes the city more vibrant. A final interesting development has been the conversion of a factory, which used to a concern of pollution because of its smoke, replacing by a software company.
The two maps indicate the main
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changes
which have taken place in the town of
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Kimsville
between the year 2002 and
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today
.

Overall
, It
is noticed
that
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Kimsville
has become much more modern city, with more buildings and transport facilities.

It can be
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seen
that the west of the city
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used
to be a green area with
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a lot of
trees,
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but
the trees have been
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cut
down to
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make
way for new apartments and football stadium. It has
been urbanized
since 2002. Another striking
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change
is that a new train station has
been constructed
, which contribute on developing of transport.

If we look at the cinema in 2002, it has
been turned
into a pub, where
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
the city more vibrant. A final interesting development has been the conversion of a factory, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to a concern of pollution
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because
of its smoke, replacing by a software
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS academic the maps below show recent changes in the town of Kimsville.

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  American English
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149 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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